First draft:

I'm Clara Matheus Nogueira, I'm 20 years old. I was born in Divinópolis but I live in Belo Horizonte since 2010. I'm an undergraduate student at FALE, where I study publishing and English. I’m on my 5th semester. I intend to work with publishing and translation, I don't want to be a teacher. On the last months I lived and worked in the USA, to improve my English and gain experience. In this class I expect to improve my writing skills.


Second draft:
I'm Clara Matheus Nogueira, I'm 20 years old. I was born in Divinópolis but I live in Belo Horizonte since 2010. I'm an undergraduate student at FALE, where I study publishing and English. I’m on my 5th semester. I intend to work with publishing and translation, I don't want to be a teacher. I will love work publishing periodicals, as a magazine or a newspaper. On the last months I lived and worked in the USA, to improve my English and gain experience. When in USA, I worked at Walt Disney World Resort, my mainly function there was merchandise, but what I did most was help with language problems, because lots of brazilians went to Disney without speak any english, this experience made me think that oral traslation may be a good thing to work with. In this class I expect to improve my writing skills.